Thats a LOUD clip! :P
Just kidding allthough i ducked when i started the track on my way too loud PC speakers :lol:
Im missing the groove of the backline in the guitar part, your not 'on top' of the bass enough with the rythm part(which is a must IMO). I would even prefer a bit of extra uptempo palmmutes on that.
On the other hand if you want to give it a more heavy feel reducing the drum and bass in volume and double tracking the guitar could work, but then i dont like the 'stiff upperlip' sound as much in the track.
So thats it, hope its usefull in some way, i usually just dont comment if the track is not how i would have done it, which is just not something i like to do, im not a critic, i dont have a musical degree, so there.