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Denim n Leather

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A chill, Sabbath/Maiden-ish type of tune (Black Dogs)
« on: July 22, 2010, 09:42:12 PM »
This is probably my favourite song that my band does. It's a bit more chill and not as heavy as our other stuff:

http://soundcloud.com/phantomisle/empress-of-dreams-demo

The Empress of Dreams
(c) 2008
 
In a temple East of waking
Where disciples once appeared
I have held my endless court these many million years

Long ago the kings of men were
By the Cruciform deceived
Seeds of myth they grew until none living believed
In the Empress of Dreams

Enthroned upon a tempest rising
Above a surging, vermillion sea
Served by senses ever reaching; the stars they dance for me

Through wasted eons of shining kingdoms
A billion worlds, a billion suns
My dreaming eye conceiving into being each and every one
All seen by the Empress of Dreams
« Last Edit: July 24, 2010, 01:39:55 PM by Denim n Leather »

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Re: A chill, Sabbath/Maiden-ish type of tune
« Reply #1 on: July 24, 2010, 04:31:57 AM »
I like the BOC vibe, and the verse parts have some cool organ like guitar sounds. The vocalist is really good, and the lyrics are original and intriguing. The mixing is decent and the effects used are effective in creating a nice laid back, but moving atmosphere.

On the other hand, there's something about the guitar tone that just isn't to my liking. Its a bit thin and compressed I suppose. Plus, the playing during the distorted parts sounds somewhat out of time and detracts from the riff. There's one part at the tail of the main riff where I can hear you should be playing like a trill but instead you just double pick it. It sort of adds an extra beat which isn't supposed to be there. Maybe it's your playing style, but what can I say man, it annoys me. lol

Personally, I'd like to hear you double track the guitars. Even though its more of a 70's, Zeppelin type song, double tracked guitars could tighten the whole thing up and give it more personality. Finally, the drums and bass sound a bit out of time with each other during the verses. This could be due to the bass having too much attack and not enough deepness, making it stand out.

Sorry for the overwhelming criticism. Rock on! \m/
<The Warpigs Are Coming, Hide your Children... and bring BBQ Sauce>

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Re: A chill, Sabbath/Maiden-ish type of tune
« Reply #2 on: July 24, 2010, 12:04:53 PM »
I think i've already given you loads of feedback over this track but i have some feedback on your thread.

Shouldn't it have the pickup names in the title? :P

I thought you would have known better lol

Denim n Leather

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Re: A chill, Sabbath/Maiden-ish type of tune
« Reply #3 on: July 24, 2010, 01:39:29 PM »
I think i've already given you loads of feedback over this track but i have some feedback on your thread.

Shouldn't it have the pickup names in the title? :P

I thought you would have known better lol
HA! Too true!

Fixed :)

Denim n Leather

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Re: A chill, Sabbath/Maiden-ish type of tune (Black Dogs)
« Reply #4 on: July 24, 2010, 01:40:31 PM »
I like the BOC vibe, and the verse parts have some cool organ like guitar sounds. The vocalist is really good, and the lyrics are original and intriguing. The mixing is decent and the effects used are effective in creating a nice laid back, but moving atmosphere.

On the other hand, there's something about the guitar tone that just isn't to my liking. Its a bit thin and compressed I suppose. Plus, the playing during the distorted parts sounds somewhat out of time and detracts from the riff. There's one part at the tail of the main riff where I can hear you should be playing like a trill but instead you just double pick it. It sort of adds an extra beat which isn't supposed to be there. Maybe it's your playing style, but what can I say man, it annoys me. lol

Personally, I'd like to hear you double track the guitars. Even though its more of a 70's, Zeppelin type song, double tracked guitars could tighten the whole thing up and give it more personality. Finally, the drums and bass sound a bit out of time with each other during the verses. This could be due to the bass having too much attack and not enough deepness, making it stand out.

Sorry for the overwhelming criticism. Rock on! \m/

Thanks for listening and for the detailed analysis!