Well, it certainly doesn't sound too metal anyways, so there is no need to spout off about it needing to be more so. I any case, a little bit of hard criticism here... You seem to be playing either way faster, in terms of BPM, than your skills can handle or you were being lazy; both of which are fine, i am a more or less beginning player (not implying that you are) so my criticism may not be too valid... but my point still stands, try slowing down the "intro" riff a bit - you will undoubtedly get more clarity, more accuracy, and maybe even have a little bit more of an idea on how the song should proceed (you can always speed it up later).
The overdrive is more or less dead on for the feel though, i think. It has much more of a punky vibe than anything, almost a proto-New Wave sound (just slower), so that amount of boost works well for it.
